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My introducer to Liberty... suggested I write about blowback.

I inquired, "Well, could you be more specific?"

He said... and I'm paraphrasing here, "Maybe you could discuss McCain and Graham, and The People’s reaction to their blatant disregard to principle."

So, I, already wanting to meet the request, asked for more insight... an outline even, to make it easier on myself; but he had already allotted what he would, to this particular effort, and left me to my thoughts.

"Inside of a Rock, a Man found a Teardrop"

Is the title of a poem my father wrote my mother. It hung from our wall when I was a child. Redundancy will show that I won’t write of the original, but the title strikes me as significant to our cause,

for...

We are a teardrop,
Encased in rock,
We are livid and lamenting.

Endowed by Our Creator,
With principled logic,
Our matter is ever expanding.

The granite is cracking,
And when it shatters,
God help the pebbles that once entrapped.

They WILL be crushed!
By the abyss of our ocean,
Tis the natural course of blowback.

- Liberty




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Excellent..

Get it copywritten and published.. put a book/ collection of your work.. could be 12.. like gold in granit, this poem is worthy and I would prefer you to get the royalties rather than some "identy theft". You want an entertainment attorney, preferably one with international experience.

My critique (since you posted, I'm as-uming you want feed back):

The simplicity of the words and format apply to a elementary level, and denile was immediate, "livid and lamenting" (apathy, which I fight, you see, so I am in denile, but aware that it is true). So, I'm feeling, elementary denile of apathy, end of first stanza.

Creator and logic... reams of tomes have been written about this God and reason, creator and logic; Aristotle, Aquinas, Ayn Rand; in your second stanza's opening, you take me from elementary denile of apathy, and elevate me to a mind blowing (our matter is ever expanding.. personal) union of creator and logic resolved with truth.

The third stanza impresses me as the action of the "livid and lamenting" (apathy), as if saying that time and evolution is only natural, granit mountain one day, sand the next) and so by seeing the granit as apathy.. there is hope created (like a tear drop), we are one of those blessed living pebbles God frees when the apathy shatters.

It will be crushed.. like a tsunami.. the forth stanze washes ashore and in the name of blowback, spits us back to the time before we came to the first stanza, and it's hard and cold and cruel out here in granit land.. you have to read the poem again to get that God/Logic high.. that comes so fast and smooth.. really great, gets the blood going.

Thank you and good luck.

Thank you

I believe you interpreted it as I meant it to be. If posterity wills it, posterity may have it, I need no claim.

Anonymous

Anonymous is the greatest poet ever, God Bless You!