There is one thing I would elaborate on, though. You wrote:
"Despite all of the obstacles, the Nevada delegation submitted a list of six states..."
If you can, please keep it historically correct.
"Despite all of the obstacles, the Nevada delegation submitted a list of six delegations consisting of 5 states and one territory..."
Otherwise, it's perfect.
If Tyranny and Oppression come to this land, it will be in the guise of fighting a foreign enemy.
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