Comment: I think this is very well written...

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I think this is very well written...

I wouldn't change much. I think that you clearly conveyed that you have given a credible deal of thought to the problems this country faces. I'm not sure of the views of your intended audience, but telling the truth as you see it is always a noble approach. If any adjustments need to be made it will likely come from your personal consideration of delivering your message more effectively to that particular group of individuals. Regardless of the response, always know that the truth is not always a popular message, but even when its painful, the truth tends to resonate with those that choose to listen.

I would only suggest two semantic changes to the current form (with no knowledge of the audience) - both in the last paragraph. One sentence reads:

"I believe that limited government is the only means to protect our freedoms because having a smaller government allows the people to freely act out according to their own whims..."

Most individuals would associate "act out" with negative behavior. I would replace it with just "act". The word "whim" suggests a transient desire without much serious deliberation. I would replace it with "interests" which invokes the feeling of more thoughtful, deliberate, and rational convictions. Other synonyms may also be effective.

Then, the very last sentence reads:

"I believe that now, more than ever, this country needs to return to the principles of the Founding Fathers, before we return to the totalitarianism that formed this country in the first place."

While your intentions are very clear in the bold portion, I think the point would be better delivered if the word "motivated" or a synonym were included. For example, "return to the totalitarianism that motivated the formation..."

Feel free to take this with a grain of salt. You've already done a great job. As far as political thought, you are light-years ahead of where I was at your age. Ultimately, this will be an ideological revolution. Violence is a blunt tool that is monopolized by the state, and violence against government interests is always used as fuel for more tyranny. It's encouraging to see younger intellectuals turning their attention toward these more important philosophical matters. Stick to your guns when you know the truth is on your side and don't let the propaganda compel you to conform against your better judgement. You seem to be on the right track, IMHO.