Comment: DP friends

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DP friends

Hope to see some feedback from you.
What I need to change in this poem?
What needs to be improved....
English is my second language -- often words have double or even triple meaning....

LL on Twitter:
sometimes LL can suck & sometimes LL rocks!
Love won! Deliverance from Tyranny is on the way! Col. 2:13-15